Hermione Granger and the Potion of Perilous Pleasure Chapter 26 (The Flesh Is Merciful)

Note: Usually, I'm not one to pay much attention to likes. If you like the chapter, you can like it; it's up to you. But the reason why I'm writing this is because the previous chapter of this story had 15 likes, and this one has 4 likes.

Now I'm not saying you should like a Chapter even if you didn't like what you read. Only drop a like if you enjoyed what you read.

But I feel like I must have made a big mistake with this chapter and I want to make it better.

So I just want to know your thoughts on this chapter and story as a whole in the comments, and what I am doing right and wrong, and what I should do to make it better. I appreciate every comment, and you can be as critical as you want.

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